huxley
2008-03-30 06:14:30
What is the point of this essay? That both Obama and McCain can be equally criticized? That both parties may be guilty of messianism or dishonesty or lack of clarity?
Clarity is important in writing too. I suggest the basics of essay writing: the Funnel. In the first paragraph, start with an opening invitation–maybe the Derbyshire quote works–and conclude that paragraph with a thesis statement for the whole piece. In the final paragraph, reword the thesis with broader implications.
Here Strawn presents a laundry list of complaints about everyone involved in the current election year–both parties, both candidates and their supporterss–and concludes with a vague plea for honesty and clarity. Thanks ever so much.
