Dee
2008-09-08 11:22:52
What an opinionated piece.
You certainly slanted everything for your girl.
How many times do you have to add the word “duh” when you dislike a fact?
This looks like it could have been written by a 1st Grader. Obviously you 5th grader would have produced a better article.
You should also try grouping the positives vs negatives, facts vs fiction, political vs personal. You wound up with a very disorganized, very odd mess of garbage!
Are you a writer, journalist or just an amateur? I suspect the latter.
